Japanese remembers Tokyo subway’s sarin gas attack 19 years ago By Margaret

Japanese remembers Tokyo subway’s sarin gas attack 19 years ago
By Margaret, 3 April 2014

Tokyo - On March 20, 1995, sarin gas attacked on subway trains passing through Kasumigaseki and Nagatacho, home to the Japanese government.
This act of the terrorism was performed by members of Aum Shinrikyo, a religious cult. Their attempt was to bring down the government and install the group’s founder - Shoko Asahara, who was respected as a god by his followers - as the emperor of Japan.
They brought sarin packets produced in their laboratory, releasing them on the crowded train cars.
This chemical killer gas killed thirteen people and injured nearly one thousand people at the peak of the morning rush hour. It is one of the most serious attacks occurred in Japan.



Margaret,

Thank you for your article - well done! There are a few corrections to be made:

1. Your title suggests that Japan is remembering this attack, but you don't mention the remembrance in your article... Why is Japan remembering this attack now, 9 years later?
2. I have highlighted words or phrases that are vague or awkward.
3. I have underlined words that are redundant.

Please let me know if you have any questions.

Kate

Celeb NEET was murderer by Hanako-san

Celeb NEET (not in education, employment or training) was murderer

by HANAKO-san, 3 Apr 2014

  

At midnight on March 3, 2014, (Hiroya Ikema >< 31-year-old) was killed on the street in Kashiwa, Chiba Prefecture, Japan. Two days later, (Seiju Takei >< 24-year-old) was arrested on suspicion of fatally stabbing Hiroya Ikema who lived in the same apartment building.

According to police, Takei didn’t know Ikema, and he wanted to rob people of money. Police had already found a knife which Takei used when he attacked Ikema that night. Takei was cooperating with their interrogation but he hadn’t apologized for his act.

“I’m glad that the case has been solved so quickly.” People who live near that place were eased listening his arrest.

Police keeps the interrogation with Takei to resolve this affair.



Hanako-san,

Very nice job reporting this tragedy! There are a few corrections to be made:

1. Please add information about Seiju Takei in the article (ie. that he is a Celeb NEET and what Celeb NEET means)
2. I have crossed out unnecessary phrases
3. I have made the phrases purple that need to be changed because they are vague or awkward.
4. I have highlighted the article errors (ie. a, an, the).
5. I have added ( ____ >< ____ ) where the order needs to be switched.

Please let me know if you have any questions.

Kate

Typhoon Maemi ravaged Korea

 Typhoon Maemi passed across Korea in september 2003. Typhoon Maemi started in North Pacific Oceans. It grows power from vapors that warm ocean supplied. Maemi come Jeju island and across Korea.

 There are imbalance of heat energy in earth. So warm air in law latitude was supplied vapor from ocean. Warm air with strong wind and heavy rain moves a high latitude. In environment point of view, typhoon is very desirable phenomenon.

 It has heavy rain and strong wind. When it lands Korea, heavy rain flooded many buildings and lands, strong wind broke buildings and root up a lot of trees. There are 130 people were killed, 11,975 people lost their house, 4 billion dollars economic damages

Is younger Tsarnaev brother a marionette? by Hanako-san

Is younger Tsarnaev  brother a marionette?

by Hanako-san, 3 April 2014

Summary:

The Boston Marathon terrorism attack happened in Boston in May 2013. In this act of terrorism, 3 people were killed and 264 injured. The Tsarnaev brothers were arrested after that. Tamerlan Tsarnaev died after a gunfight with police.

But now Dzohkhar Tsarnaev is charged with killing 3 people and injuring 264 with homemade bombs. His defense attorneys are trying to gather new evidence to help Dzohkhar. These attorneys think Dzohkhar must had been under the control of his older brother therefore he is innocent.

Reflection:

First of all, the Tsarnaev Brothers commited a crime therefore they must accept the punishment.

If the younger brother didn’t want to take part in this crime, he would have called 911 before. But he

didn’t do that. He must be guilty.

Baghdad Peace Ceremony by Hanako-san

Baghdad Peace Ceremony
by Hanako-san, 3 April 2014



On June 22, 2002, a peace ceremony was held in Baghdad, Iraq in order to celebrate the end of the war in Iraq. Over 20 countries took part in this war which continued for 10 years, and over 10 million people died.

The presidents of each country who took part in the ceremony, President Mihiro from Japan said, “The war is over. Today is memorial day for us. We must continue to live in peace forever. ” The audience erupted into applause. After that, a lot of pigeons, which was a sign for peace, were set off. This speech was broadcasted all over the world.


This ceremony was in big success.

Mudslide in Washington assigns mayor important new task by Margaret

Mudslide in Washington assigns mayor important new task
By Margaret, 3 April 2014

Summary:
After the March 22 mudslide in Darrington, Washington state, the mayor of the city took on a new role.
He has been comforting victims and their families and declaring their sadness and pain to others.

Reflection:

This article consists of only four sentences, but I could understand the background and imagine the situation of the disaster. He doesn't waste words.

Tasmanian Life by Margaret

Tasmanian life
By Margaret, 3 April 2014



Tasmania, Australia - A retired hippy couple from Japan - Yuki and Mihiro Matsui - has been enjoying their life in Tasmania, a tropical island in Australia, growing and selling tropical fruits.
They had lived in Tokyo for 30 years until their retirement, when they moved to here. They have been fascinated by this beautiful island since their honeymoon 30 years ago. Now, they are tour guides in Tasmania.


“We are really free from any stress and feel very comfortable. We have been enjoying marine sports, sightseeing and eating typical Australian food: not only fruit but also those of tribal origin. This is a heaven on earth,” Yuki said.